I think that I was really able to get a lot done this time. I made the way I said things more direct when needed and I changed a lot of the language to make the story a little more graphic than before. Other than that I know that I really need to work on grammar and also some of the organization that I used with this certain story. I know that there can probably be added dialog between him and the neighbors, which I am thinking about adding a paragraph where he speaks with them.
I am really very proud of how this story has come together and I am excited to see how the final product will come together after I revise one last time.
Process Memo - Portfolio Draft 2
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