ENC 1101-B3 & B4: Writing for Discovery

I choose to do my narrative as my portfolio draft. I choose this one because I thought it would be interesting to do because the changes I would do would involve making some parts longer and others shorter. I thought this sounded like the movies so it sounded cool. It was not necessarily hard to do but it not require much work or time to do.

Anyway, I made four scenes a little longer and in depth by adding interior monolog. I expanded on the scene where I fall off the mountain, when I find the bear, a when I am lost. I think using this really helped my story because it was telling the reader what was going on thru my head as I am thinking in the story.

I also added a little bit of description in the story so the reader can visualize a little more in some parts. It was also descriptive more because of the inter monolog.

I think I did a good job. If I had to change some stuff, I could add more description into the story. I think I wrote a good description of what is happening but I will see what my group has to say because I am not sure what the reader sees in their head as they are reading it and compare it with my vision and describe more from that.