ENC 1101-B3 & B4: Writing for Discovery

I used a lot of what my group members suggested that I change and they gave a ton of really good feedback that helped me write the revision and I liked where I went with it. I changed it up totally and just made the reader go what? So I think it works well with my story. But let me know what you think about the ending. That's where I changed it up. I also added in a little bit more of emotional stuff about the father.

What do you think about the beginning? I changed it around and just jumped right into the story. I think it works well though, but let me know what you think.

Also the ending is the part that I changed the most. So do you think I should keep it like that or change that too. I like that fact that the reader probably thinks they know what's going to happen, until the end. SO does that work or not?

Also anymore suggestions or advice would be greatly appreciated!