ENC 1101-B3 & B4: Writing for Discovery

I believe that my final draft contained a great amount of interior monologue just as the previous one did, but I also added some more.

I also added a whole new paragraph that adds into the story more and changes the story a little bit. From what my group members had to say about my draft I was surprised that they liked my story so I left it mostly the same and just added a few little extras so that the story would flow a little better.

As for the sentence structure, I lessened the lengths of some of the paragraph so the reader can better understand and read without getting lost or confused.

I added a scene to further give one of the characters that one of my group members had a problem with understanding more of a mysterious persona. I ties in better and I hope that he will be better understood now.

I chose to use the draft about the story because I had more fun creating my own story rather than creating and argument. I plan on expanding my final draft at least 150 more words so that I can add a nice twist to the plot and give a nice surprise ending rather than the corny “It was all just a dream” ending I have for now.