ENC 1101-B3 & B4: Writing for Discovery
Home Is Where The Memories Belong - PM
Written by cci03 on November 18, 2003 - 18:33
This draft was not as bad as the first part. All I had to do was put it in the first person. In a way this makes it easier because I was able to give the character more of my own characteristics whereas in the first draft I tried to think as someone completely different.

However I don't know how to end it. I would like for the main character to get back together with Anthony. What do you think?

Should the parents have a bigger role. Maybe if the main character went home and they had some sort of dialogue...
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Posted by Roxie84 on November 18, 2003 - 18:55.
You sound a lot more content with this second draft than the first. I could tell you definitely had some issues with the first one.

I think somehow you should have your main character meet up with Anthony and perhaps have them have a conflict that could be solved at the end of the story. I don't know if that's good advice because it could become incredibly cheesy, but you know what I mean. However, I do not think the parents should play a bigger role. This is a story that should only be about your character and her boyfriend.

Good job! Smiling