Writing the second draft was not bad at all. While what I mostly did was change every “Jimmy” to an “I” and all third person pronouns to first person pronouns. I also made the whole paper present tense, not past which is what it was before. I also did so minor changes by adding or deleting some sentences to make it better.
I did like writing in the first person better than third because it seemed a lot easier and seemed to flow better. On the other hand, I did not like writing in the present because it did not seem to flow as well. But I do like the way my second draft turned out because it seems to flow well.
I would like to add more plot because it seems like not a lot happened and there is not enough conflict, but it would be lengthy. I can probably add a lot more description in the plot that I currently have and I the story would be lengthy. So I will probably not add too much conflict. But I do want to add more description in my next draft which should make the story a whole lot better.
My Adventure (Process Memo)
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