2nd Process Memo
I revised this story by trying to follow the guidelines provided in the revision assignment. I think that having to write it in first person gave a twist to it. I am not sure if it is better or worse. As far as using dialogue goes, I used a lot in the first draft so I tried doing the same in the second one. I am trying to reveal how the two characters in the story have a pretty close relationship. At least that is what I am trying to have the reader pick up on. You could also say that John can act a bit immature around Jamie since they are very comfortable with each other. I try to bring that out. I would say that the hardest part of revising this story was writing it in the present tense. I don’t know why but I had just had a hard time changing up the story’s tense up and keeping the same concepts and ideas. I could use some ideas on how to improve the story. I also don’t think I elaborated enough on the actual street part, but every time I sit down and write it that is the way it ends up.
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