Process memo short story draft 2 "the loan"
as i look through the second draft of my short story, i added a lot of dialogue. i put in conversation anywhere possible based on the directions of the revision assignment. i tried to be more descriptive in my writing to "show not tell" the reader what was happening. even adding extra dialogue allowed me to do this as well. it allows the reader to get more involved in the situation rather than be an outsider to what is going on. like i said in my first process memo i wanted to add more emotion to some of the scenes because it didnt feel dramatic enough for storyline. i gave more details as well to fill the reader in on some extra things that might have sounded like they were missing. i thought the first person thing was interesting. as the writer it made me feel like i was more a part of the story rather than just the narrator. i didnt really like the changing of the tenses. i thought it was hard to change it from past tense to present tense. i'm not even sure if i did it right because some of the sentences sound really funny in present tense.
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