ENC 1101-B3 & B4: Writing for Discovery

I noticed my draft lacks a bit of originality and I could have gone more into detail on each of the characters. Also I could have added more of a conflict so that reader would have more of an interest in reading on.

In the second raft I plan on changing around the plot some to create more of an interesting tale. Also I will add a few more characters and define the setting some more.

Other than that I feel that the story is pretty straight forward, yet it has a bit of a corny moral in it.

I think I did a good job of the structuring the sentences so that the reader isn’t lost in large, overbearing sentences. I also think there should be more dialogue so the reader can get a better understanding of each of the characters.

I plan on changing the tone from dull and somewhat serious, to that of a humorous and dramatic tone. I feel that my draft was put together in a hurry and that was in fact the case, so I plan on sitting and thinking before working on my next draft. I might also change around the order of each scene, so that the reader wont know what’s going on until they look back at it.